Lately I’ve read some riveting, incredible books that I really enjoyed except … the main character had “silver eyes.” Silver eyes? Unless it’s a fantasy book, I’m expecting people’s eyes to be real colors. Human colors.
I have silver keys, a silver toaster, silver glitter, silver tinsel, silver jewelry, silver silverware … but I’ve never seen silver eyes. Or gold eyes (I have gold keys, gold necklaces, gold rings, gold picture frames, vases etched in gold.) Silver and gold are sparkly, shimmery metals that I see every day. But never as eyes.
Whenever the character with “silver eyes” looks at me, I abruptly envision a person who is really a robot inside. It’s hard to get past that visual. I truly wish writers wouldn’t focus on creating unusual-colored eyes, describing them in extensive detail (literally in thirty different ways) throughout the story. It’s distracting.
Here’s how to describe captivating eyes …
Savvy Writer Tip:
It doesn’t matter what color a character’s eyes is. Really. It does not matter. Just pick a (legitimate) color. Then don’t comment on the eye color all the time, describing it in as many creative adjectives as you can—two or three mentions of eye color is ALL we need to give us a visual of the external person. What matters to us is the expressions in those eyes. We want to see our character’s eyes glistening, narrowing, widening, glaring, staring, winking, twinkling … and we eagerly interpret the person’s thoughts and emotions. Describing expressions is how you mesmerize us with eyes. 🙂